The B Team (#1) and Red Orchard

So why did I need to know how to say “wild onions” in an Indian language? So I could go on and post this feature-length screenplay up to get feedback (now with less irritating format! 2005/05/16):

The B Team – Book 1

It’s wa-a-ay too long and needs a rewrite in general, so any advice on how to make things clearer and simpler would be greatly appreciated.

Tuey Ola is my hero.

If you have ADD like me, you might like to read this short screenplay instead (now with better format and slightly more clear if equally heavy-handed message! 2005/05/16):

Red Orchard

Tory

Draws. Sweats. Eats too much sugar-free candy.

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